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 गोलमालबाट – २
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Posted on 12-13-06 9:51 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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मैले शिव प्रकाशको हास्यब्यङ्ग्य संग्रह गोलमालको समीक्षा पनि लेखेको थिए । गोलमालमा उनले जीवका दुःख र पीडाहरुलाई अनि घरदेश छोडेर परदेशमा बस्दा भोग्नु परेका कष्ठ र कठिनाइहरुलाई कलात्मक ढंगले हास्यमा उतारका छन् । वास्तवमा पीडालाई हास्यमा उतार्नु सजिलो पनि छैन । यस्तै यस्तै कविताहरुको संग्रह गोलमालभित्रका कविताहरु क्रमशः यहाँ प्रस्तुत गर्ने जमर्को गरेको छु । आशा छ श्रद्धेय पाठकहरुबाट लेखकले न्यायो माया र हौसला पाउँने छ । साथै स्वस्थ र सभ्य प्रतिकृया सधैं मननीय पनि हुनेछ – समीक्षक ।


लभ-लेटर !
शिव प्रकाश

आदरणीय बूढी तिम्लाई
सादर स्यालूट छ
मलाई लाग्छ हाम्रो माया-पिरती
अझै भ्यालिड छ ।

धेरै वर्ष पिछ
बोष्टन सिटीबाट यौटा
लभ-लेटर लेख्दैछु
तिमी बिना भुङ्रो जस्तो
रन्किएको मेरो मन
हरिया डलरले अझै सेक्दैछु ।
के भनौ तिम्लाई बूढी
स्याप्पै सुक्यो
नेपालको त्यो मेरो भुँडी,
तालु खुइलिएर
आलु जस्तो भैसक्यो
गिरिनकाडको आशै आशमा
आधा उमेर यहीँ गैसक्यो ।

सुन बुढी !
गिरिनकार्ड पाए पछि
लौरो किनी ल्याउँछु
राम्रो डाक्टर खोजिकन
आँखा जचाउँछु
एक हातमा लौरो टेकी
अर्को हातमा झोली बोकी
एयरपोर्टमा तिमीलाइ भेटौंला
भेटेपछि आपसमा
माया-पिरती फेरि गासौला ।

अर्को कुरा
साथीभाइले भन्थे बूढी
अम्रिकामा सबै काम
कम्प्युटरले गर्छ
जुनसुकै काम पनि
आजको भोलि हुन्छ
तर यो सबै
बकम्फुसे कुरामात्र रैछ
के एत्रा ! हुन्थ्यो, भुत्रा ! हुन्थ्यो,
हुने भए त्यो गिरिनकार्डु भन्ने
प्लाष्टिककको पाप्रो छाप्न
किन पाँच-सात वर्ष लाग्थ्यो !

एउटा कुरा बुझ मेरी
परान पियारी
केही वर्ष पर्ख अझै
दायाँ-बायाँ गडबड नगरी ।

फेब्रुअरी ५ २००५ बोष्टन/अमेरिका ।
 
Posted on 12-13-06 10:09 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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उल्टो देशको हरियो पात् किन चहियो तिम्लाई
हरियालि बनाउ आउ आफ्नै बँझो खेतलाई

जिन्दगि म डलर् मात्रै होइन सबै कुरा
दौड ऐरपोर्ट् चड प्लेन् आउ एतै तिर

उता बुड दुब्लाएइ भन्छन् यता आफु पनि
फर्क अब यतैतिर देशै प्यारो भनि
 
Posted on 12-13-06 10:10 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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उल्टो देशको हरियो पात् किन चहियो तिम्लाई
हरियालि बनाउ आउ आफ्नै बँझो खेतलाई

जिन्दगिमा डलर् मात्रै होइन सबै कुरा
दौड ऐरपोर्ट् चड प्लेन् आउ एतै तिर

उता बुड दुब्लाएइ भन्छन् यता आफु पनि
फर्क अब यतैतिर देशै प्यारो भनि
 
Posted on 12-13-06 10:34 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Good on guys keep going..............
 
Posted on 12-13-06 12:25 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Krk_nepali

When you come to forum like this where ID is hidden, probably you will get all sort of comments, good, bad and the ugly: both "savya" and "asavya". Once you post you should anticipate some "asavyas" too. That's the way it goes.

May be, this forum and your techniques are not right. I hope I am wrong and you are ready to come out with second edition. You should go for more professional and appropriate websites where people visit with similar interest.

Your books won't get sold like this. Don't take me otherwise ni pheri..honest opinion diya matrai ho. Janne bho nabhannu hola. May be INLS can help sell more than how you are behaving. You are using techniques that are not quite honest like "yehan click garnuhos", instead of being direct. Plus there are several posts of the same kind. Is it necessary?? People will click, out of curiosity and you will deliver your message but hasl it served your purpose??? I doubt it. Tell me if I am wrong.

Also people don't buy books for a cause (I am being very frank ni feri).

When a "critique"/reviewer goes to this extent for publicity, suspicions are inevitable. I and Pretty were in the same wave length.
 


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